In response to Kamou's free entry:
This piece is very interesting. As always, I can definitely hear your voice throughout the whole thing. I agree with Pauline as far as this sounding like lyrics, and I like it. The beginning doesn't seem to have as much rhythm as the rest of the piece, but I cheated and read the last few lines first, so maybe I had some expectations already. There are points where I want to tell you to fix the grammar/spelling (this mental compass point straight), but the other half of me thinks that it works here. It wouldn't hurt to check punctuation, though, like its and it's.
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