Peer Response 2, Post 6, Week 7

In response to Jenna's Free Write:

That's a great found line to work with! I'm going to have to read that book. I think you did a good job with the repetition here. Although you're repeating what you've already said, you always bring something new to the phrase, whether it's new combinations of words you've already used or introducing a new idea. Some things to think about: I can't believe you did a prose poem since I know you hate them, but I applaud the willingness to do it. In the first sentence, you use "I dreamed," but in the second sentence, when you start your improv, you used the word "dreamt." I would go ahead and make that one "dreamed" as well for continuity's sake. One phrase I'm not sure about is "I strummed my pocket watch." I'm not sure quite how this would work (because a flying foam stegosaurus is totally believable), and I'm also not sure how later the fireflies would do it. Now that I think about it, it's not that it doesn't happen, but that I don't know what you mean here well enough to picture it like I can a foam dinosaur. I hope that made sense. If not you can ask me in class and I'll try to explain better. Great work though!