Peer Response 1, Post 5, Week 7

In response to Kamau's Improv 2:

First of all, let me say this is a tough piece to improv off of. I'm trying it too and haven't come up with anything worth posting yet. I really like some of the phrases you create, like "Let your blood / fill my body." That was a really nice image. I know you're just playing around with different words, but you still need to be careful to stay away from cliches. Words like "tribulations" are exactly what someone would think of when they think of God trying them. Thank you, though, for not making it "trials and tribulations." That would have definitely been cliche. At the end, I don't think you need "yet" and "and still." Those mean the same thing, and it makes it a little redundant. Overall, I think you could work with some of the phrases in here as a jumping-off point, which is the point of the improv, so good work!