Peer Response 2, Post 6, Week 3

In response to Emmanuel's Improv 1:

I really like that you chose to improvise off of Midsummer, Tobago. I also chose this for my first improv, but I think we took two different approaches to it. I was in love with the last two line's of Walcott's piece, so I started there and worked my way backwards. You seem to have taken the setting and worked from there. I think that must be an easier way to go about it, as I had a lot of trouble and yours looks much more planned than mine. The main thing I would suggest revising is the last two lines. I love the image of roaches and years scattering, but I think you need a different word in place of skull. Walcott says that the days outgrow his harbouring arms just as daughters do. Taken in that context, roaches and years would scatter your skull. Beyond that last bit, though, I think you did an excellent job.