Peer Response 2, Post 7, Week 9

In response to Sheila's "Improv 1, Week 9"


This is a well-done first draft of an improv piece. I think you have some good beginnings here.
What I would suggest is that you take what you've done here and elaborate on it. Improv pieces don't have to be in the exact same format as the original work. Substituting nouns and verbs can be a good generative device, but I think now is the time to start branching it out. You could start with the obvious theme of Thanksgiving. Where did it come from? What sort of feelings (besides thankfulness) does it evoke? What does the weather feel like? What (besides turkey) do you eat? The first stanza is a little contradicting, with the words "involuntary chores" and "preoccupation," the Thanksgiving aspect is contrasted sharply. You could take that approach if you wanted, but it would be pretty dark to talk about forced thankfulness due to a holiday. Good luck!