For my free entry this week, I did the "best overheard line" idea. The line was, "She's like Beethoven. And I'm like Houdini." I heard it in Wal-Mart walking past a group of teens that couldn't have been over sixteen. So I adapted it just a little. Here it is!
I was nothing but good to him.
My actions sang of love--
the sweet symphony of affection.
He never even heard the melody.
So I began to practice the art of escape.
Each night in my mirror I'd rehearse
my lines, tying my words in knots all too easily undone.
I perfected my disappearance, then put on a show.
He's like Beethoven.
And I'm like Houdini.
Masters of opposing crafts
can never share the stage.
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I love this poem. I love the comparisons you use and the details you provide. Reading this poem was actually funny, because when I was younger I was the one in the mirror practicing what I would say to boys. Great Job
ReplyDeleteThat is a great overheard line! Mine sucked, and was kinda gross. Defiantly not the best. I love what you did with it, you created a very nice poem out of that one bit of information!
ReplyDeleteReading your poem based on an overheard line makes me want to attempt this. Thanks for giving me inspiration LaRue. I love your stuff.
ReplyDeleteThis is great! I love how concrete it feels even while dealing with very abstract individuals. Really great overheard line, too...I still can't find one!
ReplyDeleteWhat if you set the last line, "can never share the stage", off on its own? It would hold the form and give it a nice emphasis.
And make sure you post your overheard line on Professor's Parks blog, too. That's where she's compiling them.
Thanks Jenna! I totally forgot about posting them on her blog! I fixed the end, too. I think I like it better that way. Thanks for the suggestion.
ReplyDeleteHey Casey,
ReplyDeleteYou are really talented you can take an overheard line turn into a poem very excellent I like the great masters of different disciplines