Saturday, January 23, 2010

#6

My favorite poem in the packet is Read This Poem from the Bottom Up by Ruth Porritt.
Oddly enough, the stanza structure didn't change my opinion. If something is to be in rhythm, four is the usual choice. This poem doesn't have a set meter (especially when you read from the top), but the four lines per stanza did make it pleasing to the eye.

This poem is my favorite because I actually attempted to write a piece like this in high school. I thought it was pretty original back then, but I guess it's all been done before.

Anyway, here's my poem. Instead of reading line by line backwards, you read all the way through, then read backwards by the stanza. Keep in mind this was many years ago and it has not been revised. Suggestions would always be welcome though!

Reverse

I am numb,
Floating through an endless darkness,
Unable to move or think or speak.

Suddenly, my entire body is burning.
I feel the pain of thousands within me.

I cannot move.
These straps bind me,
They tie me down.

The men lead me in.
It is a tiny room
With a single chair.

I've been waiting for seven years now. Waiting for this day
When I can once again see your face
And tell you I'm sorry
For what you did.

The gavel sounds, and I am led out,
Bound for a seven-year wait.

I admit, it's true.
I did indeed commit this terrible act
Of revenge
I am still amazed at my act of vengeance.

In a fit of rage,
I stab with the pencil
Again and again

You try to apologize,
But I am overcome
With anger,
Fear,
Hate,
And envy.

I begin to write a poem
I am numb,
Floating through an endless darkness...


I know exactly where you were.



I know it was terrible, but like I said, I did it many years ago. Seeing someone else that attempted and succeeded with the same idea made me really excited, so I pulled this one out of the vault for your enjoyment.

~LaRue

3 comments:

  1. Nice. I like your poem both ways. You may have stumbled across something that may have been invented a long time ago, but you sound like you mastered it with that piece. Kudos.

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  2. I didn't think this was terrible at all. For you to have written this awhile back with no revision it was really nice. I enjoyed reading it both ways as well. Nice job

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  3. I really like this! No revisions necessary.

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